sick

By red_haze

i'm thinking -
brown eyes. you.
so tonight... i'm sick.
blood-boned, drunk.
panic-breathing, smoking...
and i've only a [box] of matches,
red-headed heat.
i strike, and watch the flame.
but, it can't burn away
all this... sticky misconception,
breathing life into a bottle
drunk, with dreams and...
brown tipped cigarettes
bent, with yellow smoke-stains.
emotion; with a green heart
and one finger pointed, backward.
my accusation,
death warrant.
and i'm trapped
in a tornado with a gold head
...dust, spiced with regret
all wrapped up tight,
in a warm red blanket.
and it spirals down.
fall to die on the concrete
like... tequila dreams from a balcony.
there's memory for fuel, but...
that fire is burnt out,
and i'm...
i'm all out of matches.

[edit: took away the strange punctuation.]

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Published on Monday, October 13, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "sick"

On Wednesday, July 13, 2005, Sticky Kitty (241) wrote:

this was talent. Raw, unscripted talent. Feed me more. -kitty
On Saturday, February 21, 2004, capt_funguy (777) wrote:

you're gifted - i'm plowing through your work , devouring all - just .just fantastic - funguy
On Sunday, January 18, 2004, stormtalk (727) wrote:

The punctuation gives this one a jerkiness that drags the reader from consciously seeing meaning to experiencing pure imagery and emotion... awesome.
On Monday, January 19, 2004, red_haze (52) wrote:

thank you so much. your kind words mean a lot.
A former member wrote: wow i love your style of writing. it fasinates me. this is definatly one of those great poems you can't forget even if you tried. i love it
On Tuesday, October 21, 2003, red_haze (52) wrote:

thank you. i appreciate your kind words.
On Monday, October 13, 2003, Six-Out (1423) wrote:

I'm still dumbfounded...amazing.
On Tuesday, October 21, 2003, red_haze (52) wrote:

thank you. i am glad you like it. :)
On Monday, October 13, 2003, SilentStalker (1047) wrote:

...this is very powerful...and quite an interesting form, if I say so myself... -Darun
On Tuesday, October 21, 2003, red_haze (52) wrote:

thanks! i was trying to be visually vocal. i appreciate your comment.
On Monday, October 13, 2003, nell (270) wrote:

wow i resally enjoyed this read it has a rich imagery embeded in it. "on the, con.crete like... tequila dreams. from a balcony,"absolutly perfect!
On Tuesday, October 21, 2003, red_haze (52) wrote:

inspiration from my friend masa. - i wasn't sure how well my style would work. thanks for the confidence you've just given me.