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Unfinished
By Smiles
You play God
I'll be the devil in the details
I'm not okay
Razor sharp lips
Pressed
Against my wrist
Give me a kiss
And watch me fall
This bloodstained love is my sweetest mistake
I inhale your breath and suffocate
You make me feel so low when I should be high
Wishing for death only to be revived
You play God
I'll be the devil in your grasp
Marionette with melancholic stitching in my seams
I'm disposable fun with a noose instead of strings
I'm just another plaything to you
While you play God
I'll be the devil in your head
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Copyright 2018 Smiles
Published on Monday, July 23, 2018.
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On Tuesday, June 2, 2020, Divine hell
(238)
wrote:
Badass poem, congrats you deserve it.
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On Friday, June 5, 2020, Smiles
(55) wrote:
Thank you so much.
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A former member wrote:
"Razor sharp lips
Pressed
Against my wrist
Give me a kiss
And watch me fall"
This is the kind of imagery that makes me feel spiritually aroused and visually satisfied.
I love reading such vivid pictures of dangerous situations. I guess that says even more about my mental state than would probably be polite for common folk.
But hey, we poets aren't common. Merely tortured and numerous.
Lolz, great job. I really enjoyed this.
The devil is in the details.
"While you play God, I'll be the devil in your head."
Nice. Very nice indeed.
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On Tuesday, June 18, 2019, Smiles
(55) wrote:
Thank you Raheema. I'm very glad you enjoyed this peek into my mind.
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On Tuesday, July 24, 2018, I IS ME
(380) wrote:
Another one of yours that we like and you closed it perfectly. We're liking Smiles
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On Tuesday, July 24, 2018, Smiles
(55) wrote:
I'm happy you said I closed it perfectly. I was really thinking that I needed one last stanza.
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On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, I IS ME
(380) wrote:
Some of your best poets use couplets. The point is to write the way you feel it if you don't feel a stanza don't force it
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On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, Smiles
(55) wrote:
Sometimes it's hard to know when to stop and call it good. I try to keep that in mind, but no one's perfect.
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On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, I IS ME
(380) wrote:
A lot of poetry isn't perfect. We actually try to write it out some pieces will be long some short. But they all will be you. Why attempt to write a piece and withhold a portion because you're worried it may be to long. We think this is also a form of suppression. The idea is to write until you've exhausted all the pain and filth. You wouldn't go to the bathroom and take a half movement. Anyways this is our way of thinking and we're no one.
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On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, Smiles
(55) wrote:
You're exactly right. It simply felt unfinished, which is why I titled it so, but I realize that it is finished. I have nothing left to add to this piece. I like your way of thinking I IS ME. Thank you.
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On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, I IS ME
(380) wrote:
We don't think we may remember. Be good or bad, but keep writing
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