Broken

By RetalicD

Broken branches,
of a tree...
fuzzy, faces...
unclear to me.

Painfully imprinted.
genetically strand.
tracing illusions...
alone being banned!
Helplessly hoping a final breath ?
timorously taunting wishing for death!

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Copyright 2017 RetalicD
Published on Friday, August 11, 2017.     Filed under: "Philosophical" and "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: This says so much ...in so little words. I love it. I especially like that it has a rather cute ryhme while also stating something profound and real. In the beginning Im imaging a cute llittle lonely branch and then you illustrate a fear and profound tension that changes the picture quite a bit. Love it!

  • A former member wrote: It conjures up images of a patient dying in an empty room beautiful piece.

  • worm On Saturday, August 12, 2017, worm (1149)By person wrote:

    nicely penned! ~worm~

  • RetalicD On Friday, August 11, 2017, RetalicD (27)By person wrote:

    i truly feel flattered ... thank you !

  • lupus tenebrae On Friday, August 11, 2017, lupus tenebrae (860)By person wrote:

    A verbose, yet raw-knit quilt with an almost fractured cadence, the rhythm was seamless and I liked the use of ellipses to create pause, giving more weight to each line. Well written, please, enjoy your stay. Scholar

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