Untitled
By Desi VS The World
Pent up inside me is something dark
It leaves me with nothing but
emptiness and marks
What you see is a gruesome habit
But don't you know I have to have it?
Deeper and deeper I will go
Until I wake up and left with no hope.
Then comes the diziness that follows with weak knees.
I wish you would have listened to the remarks I've said
but instead you pretend like it's all in my head.
Can't you see I'm trying to make it?
All you think is that I'm trying to fake it.
How pretend is the blood and the beautiful reminders?
Oh, how I wish your words were kinder.
I only wanted your love and affection
But you treat me like I'm an infection.
Oozing pus that once was dreams
I can't even get up to meet my needs.
Sadder and sadder I became
I'm starting to believe I'm going insane.
Comments on "Untitled"
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A former member wrote:
"But don't you know I have to have it / I can't even get up to meet my needs." A lot of times, loved ones without first-hand experience with depression undermine the fact that it's a psychiatric illness. It sounds like you have someone in your life who may need a little more understanding. My heart goes out to you through your journey through these complex and emotional times. Poetry is a great way to release tension that has accumulated while feeling low. Your rhymed line pairs are spruced up nicely by the three-line stanzas dotted throughout. I'll look out for more work from you in the future. A belated welcome to DP, by the way!
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On Friday, March 27, 2015, Desi VS The World
(16) wrote:
Thank you!
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On Monday, March 16, 2015, Dismalmind
(26) wrote:
Your lines are so true... I hate to say the cliché "I know how it feels" but here we go. Great piece, thanks for sharing!