Fear

By DeafSoldier

Running through the trench,
Stumbling through the deep mud,
Bodies of men, dying and dead,
The dead and dying are everywhere.

My thoughts, they go to home,
The sweetheart that I left behind,
My child, the child I've never met,
Thinking of me, suffering in France.

Ma's custard pies,
Pa's deermeat, fresh from the kill,
The warm, cozy house, full of love,
Oh, how I miss so much.

Then somewhere near in front:
Whew... fup... fop... fup...
A bright flare goes out, clear as day.
I see the Huns, advancing towards me.
Oh, Lord help me!

The tut-tut of machine guns,
The chatter of the rifles,
The belch of the big gun,
Scream "Death!" to my ears.

The rain is splattering,
The sky is dreary,
The mud mixed with blood,
Blood of the dead and dying.

The pop of the whiz-bangers,
The fup of the Five-Nines,
I think about the gas,
Loosened my mask, in case-
And listened... Nothing...
Then the stinging poison hit my face.

It's too late, I stand there choking,
Sputtering... drowning.....
Dancing grostequely, as if the Devil took procession
Body on fire, life being sucked out.

My final thoughts go to my sweetheart,
My child, the child I've never met,
Thinking of me, as I lay in the mud,
Darkness becomes my shroud.

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Copyright 2013 DeafSoldier
Published on Tuesday, May 21, 2013.     Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

I had a dream and woke up in the middle of the night. Wrote this.
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  • A former member wrote: This is amazing, emotions ran through my mind. I love this, great job

  • Maladroit On Tuesday, May 21, 2013, Maladroit (198)By person wrote:

    I asked my husband what was the most beautiful thing he ever saw was and he said, " an explosion in Iraq. I saw a smoke trail inching to the enemy and the water tower burst into hues of colors and I saw limbs raining with bricks." I thought it to be the ugliest thing for a split second until I very sadly comprehended, the most beautiful thing that had happened for him was being saved. This, for me, reinforces why he gave that answer.

  • DeafSoldier On Tuesday, May 21, 2013, DeafSoldier (38)By person wrote:

    My dad said something similar to that.. He always said that the most beautiful thing was living another day there. Man, I wish i could enlist.

  • HeadpatSlut On Tuesday, May 21, 2013, HeadpatSlut (257)By person wrote:

    Overall it's not bad, but I think you overuse the word "death" here, repeating the words "Dead" and "Dying" over and again, they loose their meaning, which is a shame because other than that, this a really great poem that I enjoyed reading, it really echoes the No Man's Land of trenches that made up the first world war, almost reminding me of "Death of a Ball Turret Gunner" is terms of reality and theme, thanks for posting. Scholar

  • A former member wrote: I agree with what you said. The words death and dying are used just a little to much. Other than that wow. I had to wait a min just to let it all sink in Scholar

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