The Jumper

By snakeskingrin

Stepped through the window shuddering
Sick at heart, shaking and muttering
On to the concrete strip of my death
Facing the wall and seeing my breath

Creeped on the ledge as the city slept
For my lost love, I bitterly wept
Dark and cold as I hugged the wall
Wanting to jump, afraid to fall

She led me here, to take my own life
Untrustworthy woman I made my wife
Remembering the pain of her neglect
As I gave myself time to reflect

No other love could restore my soul
Bitterly broken, a hapless fool
Knowing its time, I turn around
Open my eyes and look at the ground

I picture freedom, not the hard earth
The end of my pain, a selfish rebirth
Fearing a slip. I step out and drop
Flying in blackness, now I can't stop

Free of her now, I sail toward my death
The rushing wind has taken my breath
Designed to destroy her, my upcoming end
I realize with pain, she'll probably mend

Clarity comes, revealing my haste
Too late I learn my death is a waste
I hear myself screaming, a terrible sound
My final thought before hitting the ground

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© 2008 snakeskingrin
Published on Thursday, June 26, 2008.     Filed under: "Depressed" and "Poetry"
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  • heroineyes On Friday, June 27, 2008, heroineyes (111)By person wrote:

    i agree with tiger king...i like the rhyme to the images...

  • Rebel tiGer King On Friday, June 27, 2008, Rebel tiGer King (239)By person wrote:

    very interesting write here, i do enjoy the rhym as well, it fits really good to the images i recieve from this, well written -symph-

  • snakeskingrin On Friday, June 27, 2008, snakeskingrin (59)By person wrote:

    thank you...it is a pretty old poem, but I still like it a little..:)Snake

  • SilentStalker On Thursday, June 26, 2008, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...I usually don't receive suicide poetry very well, but there's a reason behind why I extremely love this write...if I see more of this style, no matter the subject, you might end up with a faithful reader... Scholar

  • snakeskingrin On Friday, June 27, 2008, snakeskingrin (59)By person wrote:

    Thank you, I certainly hoped to portray suicide as a complete waste that the subject discovered at the last possible moment...unfortunately too late for him. Snake

  • SilentStalker On Friday, June 27, 2008, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...can't say I did the same with one I did similarly, but in another one I wrote, I added the element of fear and regret; I especially like the structure you gave to this, on top of the overall feel to it; reminds me why I myself love writing... Scholar

  • snakeskingrin On Friday, June 27, 2008, snakeskingrin (59)By person wrote:

    Thank you very much!! That is a wonderful comment, I am honored...and I read one of yours and have found my first poet to "bookmark" at this site...:)Snake

  • SilentStalker On Friday, June 27, 2008, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...could very well be because of the Poe thing; though my reason to better my writing was to achieve a poem in trochaic octameter like he did... Scholar

  • A former member wrote: I generally do not like rhyming in poetry, but this piece is very good. I enjoyed reading it. Scholar

  • snakeskingrin On Thursday, June 26, 2008, snakeskingrin (59)By person wrote:

    thanks I appreciate your comments and will take a look at some of your stuff soon :)Snake

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