Fake.
By Phoenix
i wanted to write you something today
with stolen words
and feelings from another
with an exaggeration
of my emotion
and how my heart sighs
when it hears your name
but i didnt want to be think
i didnt want to be true
i didnt want to sound like
all the fake sonnets
that remind me
of how i felt
i wanted to write you something today
something copied,
plagiarized
with big rounded letters
something i couldn't create
to express how you make me feel
when the truth is uncovered
but i didnt want to seem like i cared
i didnt want to be honest
i didnt want to be like
the other pirates
who use the words of others
to express their would-be-feelings
i wanted to write you something today
on your skin
with simple slits
in blood
with bruise marks
to cover where i broke your heart
because sometimes i do that
but i didnt want to use to my own words
i didnt want to repeat myself
i didnt want you to think i cared
i didn't think about it too much
so i decided to be simple
and say it like this...
.....Fake
Comments on "Fake."
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On Wednesday, August 13, 2008, Nixx
(235) wrote:
i like this better than some of the repedative bullshit i hear sometimes. thank you. this was good.
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A former member wrote:
I can't think of a single thing to say except FAVORITE!
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On Monday, March 3, 2008, Niemand
(355) wrote:
*breaks*
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On Wednesday, February 27, 2008, Trigger
(68) wrote:
The messege in this is so potent and clear, and like Ruby said, not too dramatic. I love the feel of this, it's almost turbulent. Great write, Phoenix, please keep it up. -Trigger
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On Wednesday, February 27, 2008, RubyXero
(481) wrote:
wow. that was nicely told. and i liked the transition...from writing something with words...to cutting it with blades and effecting your heart. great ending too. this was a really well written piece...you got the point across without being excessively dramatic about it. nice job
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On Wednesday, February 27, 2008, Phoenix
(8) wrote:
Just a note to the original author "ashrain" http://www.darkpoetry.com/dp/1854/85912. I wrote this because of an ex, she says she wrote this 6 months ago, but seeing how long ago you wrote it, clearly it is your own work, it is beautiful by the way, if only it were for me.
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A former member wrote:
this was originally fake.. wonderful