Comments by Jonas
- "I find your commentary on your own work delightfully apt. I gathered that this was plotted along the lines of a highschool football game... and that's rather common, but you transcended the common to find the thread buried in the banal that carries the current of life. I very much enjoyed this piece.
I honestly think that you could stand to polish your use of language just a touch... some of the word choices seemed rhythmically off... but that's ok continued practicde will smooth things like that over in time."
Posted by Jonas on "Friday Night Silver" by lupus tenebrae
