Comments by CjPsychotic
- "An erotica with religious allusions? I was not prepared for this one. On the critical side I'd say go through and restructure it...give it a religious structure to make it pop and sizzle just a bit more. If you've got it in you too, a little bit more length in the meat of it would add to, if it followed suit with the rest of course; it seemed just shy of being complete.
On a readers note, the religion and sex intertwining really captivated me and my attention. A good job."
Posted by CjPsychotic on "a good friday" by ebonyamore
- "I love that you didn't toss unneeded wordiness about it or over metaphoring it..I think the general straightforward simplistics add so much for this. It just ran straight and true; There isn't much I can say to critisize this. Bravo"
Posted by CjPsychotic on "once upon a time..." by ebonyamore
- "I loved it. Its something that time cannot heal nor erase, and as many times as you're rescued you never seem to fully leave your island. My only bone to pick really is in the beginning the imagery makes me think of shattered glass...if I were to make I suggestion I'd say that trying to make it seem like these jagged pieces were sharp rocks/pebbles digging into you on your beaches of hell."
Posted by CjPsychotic on "shipwrecked" by ebonyamore
- "It started out and finished pretty weak for my taste, but oh the entirety of the middle section was a "blissful labyrinth" of amazingly sewn lines. The quilt is perfectly crafted, so to speak, just trim up the edges."
Posted by CjPsychotic on "the hunter's snare" by ebonyamore
