Comments by Aleas
- "Ha haaaaa! Yes! You have no idea the big ass smile this put on my face. I think/I hope you know why, and to that end, I say, very good, young padawan."
Posted by Aleas on "Epilogue" by malevolencefixation
- "God pieces for me are always very tricky. Perhaps it's just because i feel it's impossible to comprehend something...impossible. The devil - that's possible. It's so simple to imagine the depravity one can reach. It's not so easy to conceive the opposite. I found myself wishing that I was taken on more of a personal journey, though still sacred, and less a commentary on "we"/all of us. However, again, to be honest, I think I should have come back to this at a later time, as I may have tainted myself with the rapid repeat of several words in the first half of the piece (my stupid peeves!). I'm sorry! Cheers."
Posted by Aleas on "Skeletons" by malevolencefixation
- "An honest critique coinciding with a pet peeve in poetry of mine (I don't have many, I promise), was the repeat of a word at the very beginning. You say ..."once upon a time, very long ago, there was a time..." My mind is beset with redundancy. It thinks 'once upon a time itself suggests very long ago' and 'once upon a time...there was a time' - too many times! And then my tiny puppy brought me his tiny frisbee and i lost track of reality. Onward to the rest of the poem, now, in feeling, and not in grammar. Cheers!"
Posted by Aleas on "Skeletons" by malevolencefixation
