Comments by All Members
- "...this is starkly sensuous. & then the cold striking hand of reality at the end. your title will reveal itself in time... "
Posted by FadedBlues on "yours for an hour." by jodeanna
- "Beautiful piece, only names I could think of my self were "embracing touch" or "sated act" either way really great work :-) "
Posted by Detriment on "yours for an hour." by jodeanna
- "...it's off to a great start. odd choice of protagonist: not the burly type usually associated w/a murder/madness story..."
Posted by FadedBlues on "Night Terrors." by jodeanna
- "cool...write on.! welcome to dp.
is this a short story or one that will be on-going for sometime?"
Posted by natalie on "Night Terrors." by jodeanna
- "such a powerful message, it really comes together at the end there . beautiful work, dont change a thing...this is so far my favourite poem on DP "
Posted by Unknown on "the fist that never fell." by jodeanna
- "sometimes i wonder if fearing the other is not actually seeing in them a part of ourselves..the part we hate and that scares us...i like the flow...the way you describe a very painful scene with the right words and images...love...abuse..and fear...is it really love ? thank you for a beautiful work...though i hope it's not real..."
Posted by DarkBlueClearWater on "the fist that never fell." by jodeanna
- "I liked the opening image.. the burnt hand and the fist that never fell... both seem to work well together, maybe. I also like the concept of pity and fear; I think the final stanza voices a good cerebral point. I think the falling to the knees before the beard on the shoulders through me off.... but, perhaps, this is intended to indicate the smallness of the persona when compared to the spit throwing other... the 'you' of the poem. I'm not a huge fan of second person perspective in poetry, but... it does have its effective moments. thanks you."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "the fist that never fell." by jodeanna
- "Jo, this is excellent, the mystery is enticing. in a few stanzas, you define a woman w/a very complicated persona... "
Posted by FadedBlues on "one night stand." by jodeanna
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