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- "i like the last line most.....its like the rest of it was just steading a nail in a board with fingertips and a few taps and the last line was *WHACK* drove it straight in....."
Posted by Unknown on "officially fucked" by openureyes
- "Hmmmm.... now that doesn't sound like teeth clenching to me. But at least it's official; I mean, that's gotta be better than unofficial, no? The fourth line is severely depressing. It does rob all hope. I like to think it's never too late... but I'm not sure how to interpret the last line... literally or more abstractly. I'm gonna go with the abstract and say, in general, it's good to give a fuck, even if one ends up officially fucked. all the best shweets."
Posted by Unknown on "officially fucked" by openureyes
- "Unbelivably eloquent. Undeniably relevant to my frame of refrence as well. Having experienced the raw emotion invoked after reading this profound glimpse into a strangers mind has been an unexpected gift to a fellow traveller of the confusing and often tragic path our lives can take as a consequence of our existance. "
Posted by Unknown on "what I know" by openureyes
- "awww this is tragically written, with the possibility of a beautiful life at the end. It is raw, passionate and beautiful. "
Posted by Mylissa on "what I know" by openureyes
- "clarification... teeth clenching a very good thing... to me that is.
its just begun, i guess we will see...."
Posted by openureyes on "unfinished " by openureyes
- "ah yes... before time.. my favorite. ..where dark energy and dark matter mesh in infinite gravity."
Posted by elisa on "unfinished " by openureyes
- "you can put my big bang wherever you think expansion will best serve creation, I'm in favor of a little more time before time.... not that we cant have multiverses ;)"
Posted by Unknown on "unfinished " by openureyes
- "you're so scientific... lemme warp your universe and fondle your worm holes until your singularity reverses its gravitational polarity."
Posted by Unknown on "unfinished " by openureyes
- "yeah, I'm thinkin' teeth clenching is so not good in this context... I've never really experienced bad sex, ya know.... I'm a guy. What can I say?"
Posted by Unknown on "unfinished " by openureyes
- "egads. . .. this is a little too close. its overwhelming honesty.....of falling and surrendering, even when we know we might not should. .. . .love goes against any protective barriers ive ever built; and when face to face with that truth of real love....and what it could/should be...i cling..desperate..this felt like that clinging.....to every little nuance. gritted truth here. open. admire that."
Posted by Unknown on "unfinished " by openureyes
- "I mean, it could be intense-- or it could be "oh god not this again... are you done yet?" which would be bad. best wishes for the former!"
Posted by Unknown on "unfinished " by openureyes
- "mmmm... well, hours of teeth clenching sex is something to be left with ;) Perhaps romance is a fix unto itself--sometimes... when it doesn't break more than it mends. Best of luck!"
Posted by Unknown on "unfinished " by openureyes
- "sooooo? wonderful write. i love how, at least in our poetry, we aren't in denial about our broken pieces. the fact that we probably aren't ready for romance until we can fix ourselves yet don't care. very captivating. i want more!!!"
Posted by RubyXero on "unfinished " by openureyes
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