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unfinished
By openureyes
so you've come at this semi perfect time
with my slightly flawed approach to love
i accidentally give my
pieced together heart
to you in the hopes you might know what to
do with it.
I fall
all to suddenly
shockingly and unwillingly
i get lost in the moment and am completely moved by your existence
i find my self mindlessly scribbling some words and calling it poetry
just a bit too often
i fail to remember the world is still spinning
i forget to breathe and time becomes some kind of word i used to know
the meaning
you look through me and i crumble
but when you
go
i am left with the familiar emptiness
the expected worry
the negative prophecies
the fears and insecurities that come from
giving myself to another
i may never get the chance to enjoy the Ecstasy
of this new romance
i may shut down before it begins
you
may let me down and leave me disappointed
i may only be left with
these memories and the hours of teeth clenching sex
soooo...
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© 2009 openureyes
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On Saturday, June 20, 2009, Mylissa
(845)
wrote:
awww I love...you are gorgeous.
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On Saturday, June 20, 2009, openureyes
(56) wrote:
clarification... teeth clenching a very good thing... to me that is. its just begun, i guess we will see....
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A former member wrote:
I hope there's no shut down before it begins... will this be finished?
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On Friday, June 19, 2009, elisa
(1616) wrote:
apprehension in hindsight. well said
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A former member wrote:
sure beats apprehension in foresight, huh? That may not make sense... .
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On Friday, June 19, 2009, elisa
(1616) wrote:
anticipation in foresight, preferable
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A former member wrote:
love anticipation in foresight... it's like foreplay for the brain.
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On Friday, June 19, 2009, elisa
(1616) wrote:
tis the mental fingers that fondle the space of matter in time
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On Saturday, June 20, 2009, elisa
(1616) wrote:
ah yes... before time.. my favorite. ..where dark energy and dark matter mesh in infinite gravity.
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A former member wrote:
you can put my big bang wherever you think expansion will best serve creation, I'm in favor of a little more time before time.... not that we cant have multiverses ;)
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On Friday, June 19, 2009, elisa
(1616) wrote:
i s'pose i'd be forced to swallow your big bang coming at godspeed
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A former member wrote:
you're so scientific... lemme warp your universe and fondle your worm holes until your singularity reverses its gravitational polarity.
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A former member wrote:
yeah, I'm thinkin' teeth clenching is so not good in this context... I've never really experienced bad sex, ya know.... I'm a guy. What can I say?
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On Wednesday, June 17, 2009, openureyes
(56) wrote:
exactly
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A former member wrote:
egads. . .. this is a little too close. its overwhelming honesty.....of falling and surrendering, even when we know we might not should. .. . .love goes against any protective barriers ive ever built; and when face to face with that truth of real love....and what it could/should be...i cling..desperate..this felt like that clinging.....to every little nuance. gritted truth here. open. admire that.
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A former member wrote:
mmmm... well, hours of teeth clenching sex is something to be left with ;) Perhaps romance is a fix unto itself--sometimes... when it doesn't break more than it mends. Best of luck!
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A former member wrote:
ummmm.... teeth clenching is good, right?
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On Wednesday, June 17, 2009, elisa
(1616) wrote:
grrr...
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A former member wrote:
You're so naughty.
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A former member wrote:
I mean, it could be intense-- or it could be "oh god not this again... are you done yet?" which would be bad. best wishes for the former!
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On Wednesday, June 17, 2009, RubyXero
(484) wrote:
sooooo? wonderful write. i love how, at least in our poetry, we aren't in denial about our broken pieces. the fact that we probably aren't ready for romance until we can fix ourselves yet don't care. very captivating. i want more!!!
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A former member wrote:
Wow. Nixx pretty much said what I was going to say... almost to the letter... spooky. For a moment your words ruled my world and made me apprehensive and excited, terrified and enraptured... all at the same time. Thank you!
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On Wednesday, June 17, 2009, Nixx
(240) wrote:
''i find my self mindlessly scribbling some words and calling it poetry just a bit too often '' i seem to be doing a lot of this too. i like this piece, it reminds me of who i used to be and that i shouldnt forget. thank you for this.
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