Comments by All Members
- "I personally think it ends with a ache, with the question of pounding thought. It is perfectly done...lovely. I have to say a fav. So wonderfully done!!"
Posted by Mylissa on "monochrome dreams." by verablue
- "welllllllllll.....I'm disagreeing with you....I say it captures a dream-esque feel which needs no definitive start or end...so there ya sasquatch hairy lipped goobster...hahaha *runs*"
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "monochrome dreams." by verablue
- "did that fix it? i tried to make it a pale grey, but it didn't show up on my computer so i figured i must have gotten the color code wrong and didn't bother taking it out. perhaps it has something to do with the browser i'm using."
Posted by verablue on "monochrome dreams." by verablue
- "the ending is left dangling well. reiterates the slight tilt for this piece. ..an underlying that you arent alone in your swirling, not completely isolated in the paint.. microcosms of memory linked together quietly, incoherently in places is beautiful---"
Posted by Unknown on "monochrome dreams." by verablue
- "i like the disyncopated feel; just as most dreams are. .and the dreams of us..who we are/were--- someone else's all together, we are not our own i think. ..great to see you post again
--ness"
Posted by Unknown on "monochrome dreams." by verablue
- "I have to disagree with hatter san on this one. Feels to me like it very well COULD be finished. I loved the way it ends the most. Can't wait to see where it goes when it gets to where your going."
Posted by Alanarchy on "monochrome dreams." by verablue
- "kinda jumpy...it feels like it starts somewhere in the middle which makes it displaced but interesting because the language is so unusual...it has a dreamy feel matched with human focus...interesting to me, it does feel incomplete though..."
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "monochrome dreams." by verablue
- "The mix of bittersweet emotions and images that fly by at the speed of lust and desire rushing for that almighty collision into bursting orgasm. Yeah, I guess you could say me likes this one a lot :) -Carl"
Posted by carlosjackal on "lust for lust in slot #6" by verablue
- ""Last words grey you down to Technicolor" Fantastic line, fantastic f*ing stanza, "_ _" poem. Re(a)d 4x over. IndustrialMe(N)tal colours:shattered. "Still late at night I disassemble into pronouns" -I wish I wrote that line: quite sharp & poignant. ..."
Posted by Unknown on "fuck-me-red film noir dreams." by verablue
- "This sounds like the process of becoming insane, with your digital circuitry punk noir twist that you seem to flow flawlessly…. Even your abstract thoughts seem so linear I do not know whether I am coming or going…. Slowly going insane… you gogogo girl."
Posted by Bella Butchery on "sys[tem]crash-coma" by verablue
- "I've read this twice now, and every line is stunning in its own right and as one this had me in mind of a month-long club-fest, the aftermath of nothingness begging the question, "What did happen?" Top draw write. -Carl"
Posted by carlosjackal on "sys[tem]crash-coma" by verablue
- "i like the allusions the space between breaths creates. . .and i like the forlorn dazed voice you have instilled for this piece; greatness.. . ~ness"
Posted by Unknown on "sys[tem]crash-coma" by verablue
- "from the title i knew this was you. this has to be one of my faves by you. especially "I am picking through pages of lost diaries
Not able to remember a single name
" i saw so much of myself in this...the scattered images you presented here are so cutti"
Posted by dying angel on "sys[tem]crash-coma" by verablue
- "i wish i could have stolen this concept from your mind before you wrote it... you bring a beat to the film noir genre refrences. makes me think pinstripe love afairs.... my socks = rocked."
Posted by Bella Butchery on "fuck-me-red film noir dreams." by verablue
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