Dead man loving

By just breath

your tallons etched into his heart
So crimson and yet torn apart, Diminished

You stole the mirth from upon his lips
His smile left with nowere to fall, Deprived

You took the sparkle from his eyes
His joy has nowere left to hide, Defeated

You smoothed the charactor from his face
His look is now just a vacant space, Detached

You Sratched out his soul from deep within
His body is now limp, with nothing left but flesh, Dead

So you changed your man to be like you and now you don't want him

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© 2007 just breath
Published on Friday, March 30, 2007.     Filed under: "Reflective" and "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: diminished deoprived defeated detached and dead... nice

  • Eric On Saturday, March 31, 2007, Eric (77)By person wrote:

    So sad.. What a great write!!! Your a wonderful poet!

  • urbanhumility On Friday, March 30, 2007, urbanhumility (1158)By person wrote:

    the echo of sadness is heard..................well done

  • Aunty Depressant On Friday, March 30, 2007, Aunty Depressant (423)By person wrote:

    Oh yeah, those that whip and break, are left with a shell. Works both ways...I could see me becoming that had I stayed with some.

  • A former member wrote: this is definitely one of my faves from you. write on, Lean! :)~Meg

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