Log In
Copper Sun
By Sepulcrawl
Bramble roads
Are azure with the
Blood of the sky.
Like a steely hulk
Rising ahead,
Heralding the new rain.
Sometimes I sit and wonder
“Why the trip of doom”
In the cataclysmic silence.
Unauthorized Copying Is Prohibited.
Ask the author first.
© 2007 Sepulcrawl
Published on Tuesday, March 13, 2007.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Copper Sun"
Log in to post comments.
-
On Sunday, April 15, 2007, Sepulcrawl
(78)
wrote:
is the only reason you people think this is "dark" is because I use the word "doom"?
-
A former member wrote:
*agrees with Mab* I like this poem dismal in everyway.
-
A former member wrote:
nine lines of impending darkness befalls
upon us
-
A former member wrote:
So one could just as easily praise the subtlety with which your imagery and title work to imply an untimely and violent end of sorts... apocalyptic in small words... to paraphrase Marlowe commenting on Shakespeare.. 'infinite wisdom in few words'... you m
-
On Tuesday, March 13, 2007, Sepulcrawl
(78) wrote:
thanks. and yeah, some of it may seem tenuously strewn together, but I am reasonable content with this as tight. the quotations are because that is what he is thinking, but perhaps i err
-
A former member wrote:
how tied to the word 'trip' are ya... do you want the connotations it brings?
-
A former member wrote:
I'm thinkin you might be able to broaden the significance with a different word that brings more to the metaphor, and could also be taken more seriously since 'trip' has become so colloquial anymore
-
A former member wrote:
you make the colors and key terms carry the force of all significance... nothing short of the demise of the world.
-
A former member wrote:
which, of course, would then be genius akin to Hemingway's style, for those who like Ernest....
-
A former member wrote:
gotcha... hey, I dont get the trip of doom quote, and I wonder if it should be in quotes, and I think there should be a question mark... not just for punctuation but to force the question as such... I like the imagery, but it is somewhat sparse... maybe t
-
A former member wrote:
there is a theme that ties into the question, but I don't see. is that better, dude?
-
A former member wrote:
i mean, i take it the sun is bleeding, right? and that this is a way of perceiving the rain/storm portending, but I'm not sure i see this as foreboding enough for 'doom'.. ya know? maybe if the imagery were a bit more harsh, somehow, then doom would match
-
A former member wrote:
but ya know fuckin aesthetic criticism is just a bunch of blah blah blah unless there are mutually agreed upon criteria... all subjective, so what's the point in being more than appreciative of differences? I mean, this is the question for all value theor
-
A former member wrote:
theory in the postmodern, multicultural age... hence Rorty's Death of Philosophy' where art criticism is aesthetics... field of phil.
-
On Tuesday, March 13, 2007, Sepulcrawl
(78) wrote:
could you oeople respond in any more of blase fashion?
-
On Tuesday, March 13, 2007, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
do what?
-
A former member wrote:
Strong, simple.
-
On Tuesday, March 13, 2007, Drea
(1388) wrote:
nine lines..with such impact.
Sepulcrawl's Latest Works Feed
Join