endurance

By girlafraid

He’s really out there
a semi-conscious state of self induced indulgence
whirlwinds of panoramic interest
settle him into explanations and justifications

he’s doing quite well, actually
living solely in his moments

My face might be her,
to him
my words,
her flapping red flags

but I am different
I move along quietly
slowly detaching the threads
regrettably undetected

how much more
before I break into a run?

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© 2006 girlafraid
Published on Saturday, December 16, 2006.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: This is beautiful & heartful!

  • Moonflower On Wednesday, June 13, 2007, Moonflower (298)By person wrote:

    i must say i love the bluntness. wonderflly written

  • A former member wrote: "slowly detaching the threads regrettably undetected"...incredible write!

  • Bella Butchery On Monday, February 19, 2007, Bella Butchery (696)By person wrote:

    hopefully you already broke into a sprint by now, love the blunt, subtle imegry, and how you seem to keep your heart on your sleeve in this piece

  • flying_fox On Thursday, January 18, 2007, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    This piece reminded me so much of a person I tried to love/help who broke my heart. I ended up running. *hugs to you* xxx

  • missanthropic On Friday, December 22, 2006, missanthropic (26)By person wrote:

    i love the feeling of being fractured that this piece has...not quite a break but potentially twice as dangerous. it really is very well crafted.

  • capt_funguy On Sunday, December 17, 2006, capt_funguy (777)By person wrote:

    i've yet to meet anyone who needs such a serious shaking. you're all he's got but he doesn't get it . be strong cookie ... funguy

  • Mari On Sunday, December 17, 2006, Mari (419)By person wrote:

    ..and id say put on your nikes and get ready for a sprint man! lol

  • Mari On Sunday, December 17, 2006, Mari (419)By person wrote:

    niiiiceee. ew i hate the word "flapping". but i like the poem anyway =)

  • urbanhumility On Saturday, December 16, 2006, urbanhumility (1158)By person wrote:

    concise and sharp as a blade...................well done.......urban

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