Temporarily forgotten words in tangled curves of lust.
By Possesion
I saw the coming storm,
And I was steadfast.
But it hit with a force,
I couldn't hide the emotions behind my mask.
I can't wear the bonds anymore,
Of our broken love.
So on my wrist...
There is a bare empty space.
Where there once was a glittering lie,
Filled with lust
[Bright as candle light on our backs.]
(Always and forever I've wished it were love)
I Saw the clouds foreboding,
Steadying the wind
[In my chest]
I Caught my breath.
And then in the most bastard Fashion..
[You went and IMed me]
Spread your .text.
Because you were too big of a coward,
To walk to my home.
To pick up a phone.
The scabs on my hand,
Look like decay.
And the smell of my hair,
Is still as fragrant and sweet,
As you left it.
Oh boy you'll regret it.
(Waste and waste away the day we once longed for eachother.)
Comments on "Temporarily forgotten words in tangled curves of lust."
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On Saturday, September 23, 2017, Just Dave
(448) wrote:
You very effectively conveyed the anger. You really poured yourself into this piece. I hope it was cathartic. Great write. JD
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On Thursday, September 22, 2005, MidSummers Eve
(38) wrote:
Despite what your loss would mean to the talent level of this site, (no offense anyone)I wish you had had a happy and longer child hood. This was great.
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A former member wrote:
"Oh boy you'll regret it. (Waste and waste away the day we once longed for each other.)" And so he shall...loved this...definately favorites material. Hate the reason this was typed...but love the poem. Awesome. *Evangel*
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A former member wrote:
This piece hit hard and deep, and left very prominent scars on my heart. The feeling of my heart in my chest, threatening to burst...it was almost like drowning. Wonderful...wonderful wonderful wonderful.
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A former member wrote:
Oh good god...you and I, dear, seem quite the pair when it comes to writing along with one another's lives (not that I know much about yours...but what I've read hints at it.)
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On Tuesday, September 20, 2005, ApathysKiss
(377) wrote:
…Your work is often beyond your years. I plunged into the squall of the first stanza and particularly reminisced the somber second stanza ‘Bright as candle light on our backs.’ A nostalgic penned beginning a contrast to his foolishness following…
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On Tuesday, September 20, 2005, ApathysKiss
(377) wrote:
and a ricocheting ending remembrance of decay absolved by the line ‘And the smell of my hair, Is still as fragrant and sweet, As you left it.’ Lovely. ~m~
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On Tuesday, September 20, 2005, Possesion
(136) wrote:
Thanks so much AK for that comment (it was well worth my time) And the compliment was well ingested (writing beyond my years..Pfft..watch out my ego might swell into it's own being and suffocate us all)
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On Tuesday, September 20, 2005, serotonin lost
(140) wrote:
*pops the head swell just to re-inflate* this was amazing and i couldn't agree with apathy more, your writes are far beyond your years. very well done
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On Monday, September 19, 2005, Just a Rose
(25) wrote:
wow this was great, "There is a bare empty space. Where there once was a glittering lie, Filled with lust" great write
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On Monday, September 19, 2005, Dei
(663) wrote:
gasp! I love it!