My Last Wish

By Eladrim

Since you've turned your back i've been dead inside.
Filled with a longing that will never be appeased
You were the one I could confide in,
But most importantly you were my love,
My only hope In a world tattered and torn
Where Misery reigns on it's scarlet red throne.

My heart, like my entire world, is crushed and cold.
In the desolation left by your passing.
The solitude would not seem so bad,
If I had but a memory to hold.
All I ask is that you continue walking,
Don't come back for your touch washes my walls away.

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Copyright 2005 Eladrim
Published on Tuesday, May 10, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Again I love it...you're a great writer...last line is the perfect ending.. Very good words..descriptive..flows nice. I much love it. -Salem

  • A former member wrote: I like this ... tis very good. Even though you do not rhyme a lot it still flows very nicely as if it were meant to rhyme.

  • Eladrim On Thursday, May 12, 2005, Eladrim (47)By person wrote:

    yeah i was experimenting with a choppy kinda rhyme...wasn't sure if it was gonna work or not

  • Serenity On Tuesday, May 10, 2005, Serenity (469)By person wrote:

    Wow. Such a way with words you have. Keep it up!

  • Elise On Tuesday, May 10, 2005, Elise (187)By person wrote:

    Thats very heartbrokenly written. The last lines powerful, full of meaning. I like this a lot.

  • blue On Tuesday, May 10, 2005, blue (1409)By person wrote:

    this was good. though i didn't quite get "desolace" ..hehe, i'm not sure that's even a word.. desolation?? that seems to work.. i really like the ending too, see? you just needed to clear your mind. ~b

  • Eladrim On Tuesday, May 10, 2005, Eladrim (47)By person wrote:

    and you're right, i did mean desolation...cursed typos...

  • Eladrim On Tuesday, May 10, 2005, Eladrim (47)By person wrote:

    yeah you were right, it all came together :)

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