Ice
By Eladrim
Go ahead, rip it out again, you'll only find ice.
Not so much fun when I refuse to bleed is it?
Not so much fun when I refuse to scream is it?
Who's on top now?
Sure i've become cold.
Sure i've pushed away from everyone I love.
But at least I win!
At least you will never defeat me again.
This is the price that I have chosen to pay.
Cut me up as much as you want.
You won't get a single drop from me.
You thought you had me down but i've come back
To shove my bitter tasting victory down your throat.
I wanna see you choke on it.
I wanna see you cough and vomit and suffer.
You made my life Hell, I wanna return the favor now.
I only wish that I could take direct offensive.
What I would give to watch you bleed for once.
To watch the knife go in
And be chased out by a stream of vile rotten blood...
But instead I must defeat you by stopping your attacks. And I have found
a shield.
Ice is my shield, I fill my veins with it
Just to beat you, don't ever doubt how far I will go...
Comments on "Ice"
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A former member wrote:
Now that's what I call heavy metal. Write on!
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A former member wrote:
Ice is a great metaphor. I've felt that way on and off for a while.. it means so much. I will go on to read more of yours ..I much like it. -Salem
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On Sunday, August 28, 2005, abattoir
(115) wrote:
burrr...this was cold, driven, maddeningly angry. sick fuckin wrt.I loved it.abattoir
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On Tuesday, July 12, 2005, island warrior
(210) wrote:
Cold and calculating write.I love it.
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On Monday, July 11, 2005, Full blame
(28) wrote:
I've read this over a good many times. the lines read me without fail. good expression. favorites definently
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A former member wrote:
I suppose I would be partial to the subject... The mental images painted within this piece are golden...
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On Friday, May 13, 2005, BleedSilver
(298) wrote:
This is very good. I like your idea behind it.
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On Thursday, May 12, 2005, Labitina
(37) wrote:
I really relate to this it's an awesome write you had a point and you made it very nice
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On Monday, May 9, 2005, Serenity
(469) wrote:
This is powerful! I love it awesome job :)
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On Friday, June 24, 2016, Serenity
(469) wrote:
I still love it.
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On Monday, May 9, 2005, Forgotten Angel
(310) wrote:
yeah, i agree w/ Elise, somebody has hurt you bad..and this is one of the ways to vent..and protect urself (poem n the ice thing) i personally put a wall around my heart..and im very weary..great write n welcome 2 DP! -Kel
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On Monday, May 9, 2005, happilydepressed
(409) wrote:
great write
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On Monday, May 9, 2005, Elise
(188) wrote:
For someone new at this, you'd never know by reading your works. Someone has hurt you to the point where they can't get in anymore, powerful.
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On Monday, May 9, 2005, Eladrim
(47) wrote:
wow you hit that right on
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On Sunday, May 8, 2005, Eladrim
(47) wrote:
I don't know why i can't reply to comments...so i'll do it this way. thanks for the welcome kristy and the approval WhiteHorse. As my profile states i'm very new at this so i appreciate comments
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On Monday, May 9, 2005, Eladrim
(47) wrote:
*testing reply*
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On Sunday, May 8, 2005, VenomPlease
(134) wrote:
So raw and powerful. Nice ending as well. Great work
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On Sunday, May 8, 2005, Sin
(1168) wrote:
trading love for apathy...what a bitter demise and what a price to pay to not feel pain...welcome to DP ~kristy