In lack of anything substantial

By Storm

My soul is decomposing
ridding the body of its
purpose.
Soulless I walk
through the valley of darkness
afraid no more
I have no more

(reason)

All I had was a pointed dagger to your
bleeding heart
and no consciense to stop me.

Never knew I regret deeper,
more tormenting,
than that I feel standing over your shell.
Emptied for me,
as the sky falls down upon us.

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Copyright 2004 Storm
Published on Saturday, November 6, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • VenomPlease On Wednesday, December 22, 2004, VenomPlease (134)By person wrote:

    "All I had was a pointed dagger to your bleeding heart and no consciense to stop me." chilling. excellent write

  • Blood of Winter On Wednesday, November 17, 2004, Blood of Winter (296)By person wrote:

    awesome piece...I love the last stanza, really caught my attention and drew me totally in.

  • Angst Queen On Saturday, November 6, 2004, Angst Queen (370)By person wrote:

    What a feeling, one I am certain we are all familer with in some fasion or another. I like this. Great job.

  • Zhee On Saturday, November 6, 2004, Zhee (529)By person wrote:

    brillaint!.. the emptiness and desolation you portrayed here was profound!

  • Lynaes On Saturday, November 6, 2004, Lynaes (854)By person wrote:

    It feels like you were breaking as you wrote this. Lovely work. Seems really delicate.

  • agentlemenspromise On Saturday, November 6, 2004, agentlemenspromise (42)By person wrote:

    my soul is decomposing... i love new ways to fall apart. ~Gentlemen

  • Six-Out On Saturday, November 6, 2004, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    My, my...this was entralling. Short, but packed one hell of a punch.

  • manywalks On Saturday, November 6, 2004, manywalks (747)By person wrote:

    The last line just drove this piece a little deeper, wonderful. ~ mw

  • mysticventures On Saturday, November 6, 2004, mysticventures (527)By person wrote:

    left me feeling empty as well - nicely done!!

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