He Is You

By Blyss Rayne

When I look at him
(i see you)
When he talks to me
(i hear you)
When he holds me
(i feel you)
When he kisses me
(i taste you)
When he plays his guitar
(it's with your hands)
When he keeps me warm
(it's with your arms)
When he makes me cry
(it's with your lips)
When he looks at me
(it's with your eyes)
When he cries
(i want to tell you it's alright)
Now that I know him
(i want to tell you i love you)

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Copyright 2004 Blyss Rayne
Published on Saturday, June 12, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Serenity On Thursday, May 12, 2005, Serenity (469)By person wrote:

    Wow that says a lot with such a wonderful way of words. Excellent job

  • A former member wrote: i like it alot *thumbs up!*

  • SilencedAngel On Sunday, June 13, 2004, SilencedAngel (52)By person wrote:

    very nice

  • Blinded_Tiger On Saturday, June 12, 2004, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    This is a great idea, and again it holds alot. Ill suggest making an ending after "(i want to tell you i love you)". So that it work in form, with two poems, and two endings.

  • Blinded_Tiger On Saturday, June 12, 2004, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    know im being noughty and direct and all, suggesting a change ;) But is becouse it is a nice work. Tiger

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