A Dimly lit Carnival Ride

By AshtrayDirt

one after another...
people enter
making sure they have enough change to frantically shove in the machine
tiny black rooms just big enough to sit and ejaculate in
the floors remind me of a sticky carnival
only their faces wear opposite expressions
...paranoia....lust....emptiness

p e o p le
enter
one
after
another

you have the choice of watching the result of choice recorded or live with a plastic partition in between you and the one who made a choice for their future

people enter
red faced, whisky stinking
one
after
another

watch, cum, leave.

(all the while never using the tissues provided on the wall)
in progress....

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Copyright 2004 AshtrayDirt
Published on Tuesday, April 13, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Thursday, March 15, 2018, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    Brilliant. That last line ends things perfectly like a sad punch line but at the same time I'm intrigued to know how this would have panned out if added to, or maybe that you haven't is entirely the point.

  • Northstar On Monday, August 9, 2004, Northstar (374)By person wrote:

    dont know quite how to react to this one...would be nice to see what you would add onto it

  • capt_funguy On Tuesday, April 13, 2004, capt_funguy (777)By person wrote:

    LOL ... great write ,,, question ... what the fuck? .... this is quite real , and it is everywhere ... they freakin wait on line ...lol ... it is a side effect ... but of what? ... very cool ... funguy

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