Icy death

By gracefullytorn

Icy Death

the goosebumps travel too quickly
turning smooth skin into valleys and mountains
making hairs stand up straight
and cold known
chilling the blood
slowing circulation
extremitties turn blue, then black
crumble and fall off
open wounds frozen shut
crying tears of ice
breathing deep with no inhalation
lungs turned into a folly of oxygen
nothing moving, everything slow
too slow to handle
years in every second
make my tired heart grow old
snow never looked so painful
six sided flakes of agony
surrounding and incasing me
there is nothing to grab
to pull me away from the darkness
glaciers are too smooth
too hard too loveless

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Copyright 2004 gracefullytorn
Published on Tuesday, March 30, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • girlafraid On Saturday, April 3, 2004, girlafraid (479)By person wrote:

    the last four lines are brilliant...I also love the pace...it's almost fast moving, but then I had to slow down to read every frightening line..

  • purr_verse On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    beautiful and melancholic; immersive and evocative...i can feel the chill... i particularly like the line "six sided flakes of agony" ... very nice. :)

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    whoah... anyone considering climbing Everest should read this first. Scary as hell - great descriptives. I really liked "snow never looked so painful". Great stuff. Fox

  • K_Love On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, K_Love (525)By person wrote:

    "open wounds frozen shut crying tears of ice", this is my favorite part. I love this you putting images in my mind, I feel all of this great write ~Kirsten~

  • Anth On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, Anth (1126)By person wrote:

    this is absolutely brilliant totally vivid, i really feel the words, and the coldness, a compelling illustrating illustriuos poem, leaves me feeling quite warm your just brilliant

  • gracefullytorn On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, gracefullytorn (61)By person wrote:

    *smiles*

  • A former member wrote: I simply love it ;) -mitch

  • gracefullytorn On Wednesday, April 14, 2004, gracefullytorn (61)By person wrote:

    hey its mitch haha

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