Awake!

By AshtrayDirt

Awake!Fair child
for the sun has set

Eyes pinned wide

She bleeds into the stars

her body quivers for
the sight of light engulfed in darkness
watching her beloved
warms her unaged blood

Skin of pale rose petals
eyes with coal centers

)in progress...ah i hate this one.._) i cant get it to come out right!)



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Copyright 2003 AshtrayDirt
Published on Tuesday, November 25, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Stranger On Wednesday, December 3, 2003, Stranger (263)By person wrote:

    I really like the language in this: "She bleeds into the stars", " Skin of pale rose petals / eyes with coal centers"; intense visuals.

  • Alanarchy On Wednesday, November 26, 2003, Alanarchy (1168)By person wrote:

    Good so far. I can't wait to read the finished product.

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