changing of blades PART 1
By muhammad wasif baig
a man out of luck
in that rainy night
the love of his dream
turn to ash as he saw
the house of his in the heaven
starts to burn
hope turn to ash
as the flame started to rise
bringing the flowers to the end
of their smiles
afterwards
pieces of spectacles
were covered in red
as he changed
the person
who lived
madly drifted
so far the his tales were known
but luck was always drained
tools he used
were never this strange
his words became so discreate
the change was deeply inhereted
thoughts of his were so gory
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Author's Note:
i will be waiting for the comments. I know this poem is not that good . the time taken to write this poem is 15 min , In other words when i opened the website and after reading some poems i decided to write one. then i just wrote one .Comments on "changing of blades PART 1"
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On Wednesday, July 28, 2021, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
I think you just need to tighten up some of the language a bit, overall I think this is a promising piece. Keep it vague adds to the sense of mystery and hints at an untold story. Ciao, T/S
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On Thursday, July 29, 2021, muhammad wasif baig
(1) wrote:
oh ok and thank u for the tip i will keep in mind