Empty Plate
By Queazenart
As the days get slower
And the nights get longer
I am quickly finding
Life's not getting better.
"Transitional adulthood".
I still have no idea
What this transition's for.
"Pain is Pain",
That's what they claim.
It's not so simple
No matter what they say.
The parents tell me
That this will go away.
It's not so simple.
I don't care what they say.
I can't find comfort
In friends or family.
They're all so busy,
And feel so far away.
And I can't sleep
Because I keep thinking
How I might be
If we didn't all leave.
I'll spend another night
Alone in this bed
No one beside me
No shoulder for my head.
I can't find peace
In these four vacant walls.
I just feel lost
In this empty urban sprawl
Recently that's just how it goes.
Suffering this struggle all alone.
I guess that this is life for now
Until I'm brave enough to get out.
So I'll just learn to stand
Occupying dead space.
I'll pretend to be sustained
By this empty plate.
Author's Note:
Feedback is much appreciated.Awards
Comments on "Empty Plate"
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On Sunday, October 23, 2016, 10 Forty Three
(543) wrote:
Reading this poem felt like like I was reading one of mine from when I was around your age because I felt the same way. Let me just say that things do get better. They get easier. Just hang in there bro. Great write and congrats on PotD. - 10:43
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On Sunday, October 23, 2016, Adagios
(716) wrote:
Congratulations bro on POTD much much deserved. This one was strong and steady with a perfect end. I had to reread it several times. Great job!
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On Sunday, October 23, 2016, Queazenart
(200) wrote:
Thanks, man! It was a nice surprise to wake up to! XD As always, I appreciate your comment.
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A former member wrote:
It was intense and sad but it kept me ao focused really awesome work to the top to the end..
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On Wednesday, September 21, 2016, Gypsyeighty3
(45) wrote:
I felt so many emotions while reading this, I guess because I relate to it so well. Been there all my life... alone and depressed. Anytime I talk about it with someone close they act like it's no big deal. I feel for you. The whole thing felt all to familiar. I'm always told I play the woe is me card, so I get the frustration of not being able to talk and feel close to those who are supposed to be closest to us. I very much like this piece, thank you for sharing a piece of yourself.
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On Wednesday, September 21, 2016, Sashasetsfire
(18) wrote:
I found this piece very well written and I can feel myself relate throughout. I hope all is well, keep your head up.
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On Tuesday, September 20, 2016, 10 Forty Three
(543) wrote:
In my opinion, I think this poem was written just how it was supposed to be written. I feel a very similar way but let me just say that Willow is right, you are not alone. We might all be strangers but we are also a family here on DP because we can relate to one another and we are not judgmental. Sometimes talking to a stranger is better than talking to a person you know, so if you ever need someone to talk to or vent to, feel free to message me. - 10:43
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On Monday, September 19, 2016, out there
(166) wrote:
I think what you're going through -at least in this poem- is very normal and it will pass .. things will look differently soon enough. You know that I'm sure. Best to talk it through with a good friend if you can -don't worry about imposing I'm sure you'd be there for them. With regard to the poem I think you write succinctly but I get the impression you write within yourself by which i mean I think you can write more artistically, even if that might mean bordering on the pretentious- I personally (and it's always a matter of taste) like to see something different in the wording when I read a poem something which really affects.. I think you have more of that in you. Hope that's OK to say, it's with the best intention. I think you're writes are good in conveying your message but I also think there's potentially a lot more to come from you poetically speaking.. And gosh that's a long comment. Write on Queaze.
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On Monday, September 19, 2016, Queazenart
(200) wrote:
Thanks for taking so much time to write such a formulated response. I guess I do write "within myself", but that's because I subscribe to the belief that writing should be clear and precise. That belief might make me a little bit of a simple poet, but I enjoy it and that's what matters. I have so many poems that I'm nurturing into fully realized pieces so maybe one of them will be a bit more eccentric, a la everything you write :^) Again, thanks for the comment. The only thing I didn't like was the life advice at the start XD
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On Monday, September 19, 2016, out there
(166) wrote:
Haha good stuff! I'll be sure to keep the life advice to myself next time!