Hellish Dreams (Version I & II )

By Damon Tarloth

Darkness will ultimately reign,
My persecutors lay the torture down on me,
As they relish in my pain,
I fight and plead to be free...

Hate Flashes in my eyes,
They grin and slash with fury,
It flays my flesh and silences my cries,
The torment feels like an eternity...

The tables will change some day,
Grit my teeth and bide my time,
Like the sleeping giant I will lay,
And wait for my opportunity...

Hellish Dreams - Version II

Darkness will ultimately reign.
A whip of razors incessant lash.
Sadistic laughter as I scream in pain.
Crimson splatters after each new slash...

A demented Hate flash in their eyes.
Waves of torture, wracked with pain.
They flay my flesh and taunt my cries.
As parts of myself cease to remain...

Embers of vengeance constantly ache.
A docile servant I must be.
One lax moment or slight mistake.
And Revenge becomes my reality...

Damon Tarloth

I hope you also think this is a superior version to my original "Hellish Dreams" poem...

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Published on Tuesday, April 12, 2016. Filed under: "Horror" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

My Best 3 Poems are PURELY TAINTED / THERE IS NOTHING MORE THAN THERE WAS BEFORE / SEDUCTIVE PAIN

Comments on "Hellish Dreams (Version I & II )"

A former member wrote: Quite an insightful glimpse into hell. On key with flow. It seems finished but the last stanza doesn't go with the overall structure.
On Tuesday, February 24, 2015, Damon Tarloth (143) wrote:

As this is one of my least favorite pieces that I have ever written, and I only have 1 worse than this one as I wish you would not of read it, but I will fix that with some alterations... :)
A former member wrote: It's not about good and bad. It's about the release. I see good in all poetry if it expressed what your feeling.
On Tuesday, February 24, 2015, Damon Tarloth (143) wrote:

This was one of my beginning pieces that I had written and I didn't post it for many months after writing it as the flow was off, the words were off, everything was off. I should of either scrapped it or altered it before now. I put some time in and reworked this into a better version... I think so anyway :)
A former member wrote: Yes... Revenge is a sweet thing..:)
On Thursday, June 26, 2014, Damon Tarloth (143) wrote:

This is one of my least favorite pieces along with a (Fantasy Land of Happiness) trilogy I wrote as a spoof for a friend. People took it the wrong way as a serious write, when I only meant it as a jest. I should un-post Hellish Dreams, as I think it is poorly written; or just rewrite it. Thank you again for reading my words :)
A former member wrote: Mmmm... Well, I think this piece belong here and it shouldn't be eliminated.. But that's your choose at the end. As I said before, this piece creates the appropriate atmosphere too.. :)
On Wednesday, January 15, 2014, Angramis (22) wrote:

Excellent work. Much enjoyed the graphic visuals, superb writing. Keep writing and writing, very graphically great.
On Thursday, January 16, 2014, Damon Tarloth (143) wrote:

Thank you...
A former member wrote: Great poem and visual. Very well done. I enjoyed this very much.
On Thursday, January 16, 2014, Damon Tarloth (143) wrote:

Thank you very much :)
A former member wrote: Vengeance is a powerful emotion, be careful it doesn't consume you. The old proverb proves too true. Besides that I liked the rhythm and rhyme, very well done my friend. Glad to see you here, much love ~ RIch
On Tuesday, January 14, 2014, Damon Tarloth (143) wrote:

This is a community of good people. Thanks for the positive assessment. I almost didn't post this one because it's very simple and not very long, but it also ties to some of my other ones in a personal way...
On Tuesday, January 14, 2014, Damon Tarloth (143) wrote:

Good to see you also :)
On Monday, January 13, 2014, megaprime81 (743) wrote:

I'd say: Indeed, these are hellish dreams; i hear their laughter mingled with your screams; how torment is unfair and agony's imprisoned there; i said it once and i'll say it again, you deserve a 10.
On Monday, January 13, 2014, Damon Tarloth (143) wrote:

Thank you very much...