a brief eternity in prose #1
By RhymeBound
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Behind
me the remains of the bar were a roaring, angry blaze. A sudden gust
of wind almost freed my nostrils of the smell of burning wood and plastic.
The fresh air allowed me to gather parts of my wits, but the better
part of them were as scattered as the embers flying forth from the broken
door and windows into the uncaring darkness of the night. I was missing
one of my high heels, my dress was torn from bottom to hip and I felt
a liquid, blood most likely, trickle down my leg but I knew not whence.
They
say not to pass through doors that the devil opens up for you.
For
me he opened the door of a 1955 Chevy the color of vanilla ice cream and
I got in.
I’ve
noticed the car back when we’ve entered the bar. I remembered it because
the gangbanger inside was oogling me all the way as we went across the
parking lot. I also remember feeling disappointed that the devil did
not seem to mind, followed by feeling silly for even contemplating such
a thing.
The
inside of the car was a bright caramel that went well with the ice cream
theme. Tiny red dots covered the inside of the windshield and a small
pool of blood had formed in a fresh dent in the dashboard, with an ugly
tuft of hair sticking out of it as well as a few black shards swimming
lazily on top. The remains of the ganger’s sunglasses I assumed.
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“What did you do to him?”
My
voice sounded oddly far away in many ways. I wasn’t really interested
in what had happened to that guy. It was just an odd attempt at reestablishing
a sense of normalcy, something that’s been sorely lacking the entire
night, by making conversation.
The
devil started the car and answered my question merely by looking at the
glove compartment in front of me with the dirtiest most sinister smirk
I ever saw.
I
dared not open it as we drove out into the night, an ever cheerful tune
on the devil’s lips...
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Comments on "a brief eternity in prose #1"
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On Sunday, December 23, 2012, Aunty Depressant
(423) wrote:
Have to admit, not used to you writing in story form...and knowing a wee bit in days of yore, could not help...for at LEAST a moment envision you in heels. Had to shake that off and re-read. Threw me for a loop! But a lovely bit of loop from whence to be thrown :)
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On Friday, November 30, 2012, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
wow love the imagery and flow
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A former member wrote:
I think the same, can you write what continue?
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On Thursday, October 25, 2012, Dei
(663) wrote:
whoah. This was so nicely written. Totally kept my attention. The ending was actually not expected which i appreciated. This felt really heavy and deliciously dark.