Take Me

By horrorchantenshi

I hear the whisper once again,
screaming, as if in pain
I fear that I may go insane
going down memory lane.

Remembering when I was small,
Smiles, and giggles, no care at all.
Until the day I came to see,
That wasn't who I'm meant to be.

I thought I knew where I would go
until that day did I know so
the fire took them all away
going down memory lane.

I thought I knew, thought I could see,
The burning flames in front of me.
A waxy light before my eye,
But burning light that isn't shy.

A windy night, I could not stop
A waxy stick, with flame a top.
A frozen eye, and I could stare,
A burning house could not compare.

Hoping not to say goodbye
Watching them right as they die.
Feeling guilty I'm alive,
Knowing that they can't survive.

Monster flames, because of me,
Nothing there, I could set free.
Their crying screams kept me awake
I'm wishing my soul was to take.

Take me, not them. Twas' my mistake
and please to hell I should awake.
Save me from my misery,
Until the dark is what I see.
 

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Copyright 2012 horrorchantenshi
Published on Thursday, March 15, 2012.     Filed under: "Rage" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

This did not happen to me I just like this poem. I made it in like 5 minutes
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  • Fallenfromgrace On Friday, January 4, 2013, Fallenfromgrace (103)By person wrote:

    This one brought tears to my eyes... but once again some of the words just seem "shoved" into place.. you know..? When I'm having a hard time comparing certain words I write down ALL the words that rhyme or ones that would work until it all just falls into place. :)

  • The_Broken_Fox_2112 On Thursday, March 22, 2012, The_Broken_Fox_2112 (70)By person wrote:

    Again, I feel that some of your word choice would help the flow of the poem, as the rhymes seem forced or chopped. I watched a house burn down before, and it's a scary thing to see. Being the cause of it would probably make me feel much like this. I like your insight to the realistically tragic. Kudos.

  • horrorchantenshi On Monday, July 1, 2013, horrorchantenshi (36)By person wrote:

    Hey i fixed the poem so it sounds much better.

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