A Deadly Reaction to Her

By Ultimate Mistake

 Butterflies flutter in my stomach with razor wings
I grab my chest as my heart skips beats
Gasping can no longer fill collapsing lungs with air
Ceasing to breathe may happen whenever she's near
One thousand fireworks set off my imagination
One thousand waves crash on the shore of a mystic ocean
She is just inches out of reach
and if I even try to get my hands on her she slips away
Teasing finger tips just like falling sand
I frantically try to hold it in my hand,
but it's just useless!
The mist of pain and melancholy hits my face
Tears fall from my eyes, I curse at the wind!
My heart sprouts wings and flies out of my chest
I watch, in horror, as it flies off into the sunset
Solemn nostalgia...is all thats left

Unauthorized Copying Is Prohibited. Ask the author first.
Copyright 2011 Ultimate Mistake
Published on Thursday, November 3, 2011.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

I wrote this about a girl who i really liked; she moved away before i could tell her how i felt
Log In or Join (free) to see the special features here.

Comments on "A Deadly Reaction to Her"

Log in to post comments.
  • A former member wrote: baby i love you, perfect

  • dwells On Thursday, November 3, 2011, dwells (4177)By person wrote:

    Reminiscent of Meatloaf's Bat out of Hell, at least for me. Very well done and towers above the usual fare on this subject.

  • Ultimate Mistake On Thursday, November 3, 2011, Ultimate Mistake (21)By person wrote:

    What did you mean in that first sentence? I'm kinda confused lol

  • dwells On Thursday, November 3, 2011, dwells (4177)By person wrote:

    Hi U.M. the third and next to last lines are exactly what Meatloaf sang about when he crashed his bike and lay dying. This was a big hit about 15 years ago (I'm dating myself) - thanks.

  • Ultimate Mistake On Saturday, November 5, 2011, Ultimate Mistake (21)By person wrote:

    I feel odd know. Meatloaf(in my opinion) sucks =\. Finding out that i came up with something similar to what he's written is a huge downer lol. Well...thanks for your comment anyways

Contribution Level

Share/Save This Post



Join DarkPoetry Join to get a profile like this for yourself. It's quick and free.

How to Criticize Without Causing Offense
© 1998-2024 DarkPoetry LLC
Donate
[Join (free)]    [More Poetry]    [Get Help]    [Our Poets]    [Read Poems]    [Terms & Privacy]

Attention: Darkpoetry is now in maintenance mode and will be shutting down soon. Save your work if you wish to keep it.