The Passive Observer
By Ocean of Truth
Floating
Coasting
Lackadaisical
Resting lazily in
this gutter
With the rest of the trash
Tossed here by their
Unobservant owners
Lost, never to be found
For
there is no longer
A need for this hollow wrap
With nothing
but a faint smell
Of what it once held
He sits here,
with no will
To ripple the calm waters
Though now its not
much more
Than a puddle under foot
(And they stomp at a whim)
And yet he waits
Sitting calmly on the outside
While
the rage builds inside
Held back by a dam built from his love
For he has no use for it
As of late
And he can't show
it
Because that would breed change
And the next step of evolution
Can only bring more pain
Only mixed by this spoon forged from
angst
So he waits, lost in thought
Thoughts of nothing
more
Than thinking of life
A life of which he has no part
No opinion to be had
And no thoughts to be shared
Comments on "The Passive Observer"
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On Monday, May 9, 2011, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
For the record, I absolutely ADORE this:) You're showing you improvement in everything you do... Very Nicely done...
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A former member wrote:
resonating... full of implication and open for application... so very open, yessirree... I enjoy mapping the ways this means to me.. thank you. I'm thinking maybe "it's" and maybe not so much the "your" unless this is a personal preference considering a particular person in mind? Just some thoughts.... really loved the description and the floating feeling this carries throughout... well done *bows*
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On Monday, May 9, 2011, Ocean of Truth
(43) wrote:
I was really trying to steer wasy from making this personal, because I've been told since Elementary school that I would be a better writer if I could write better impersonally. Always love the feedback ainsof, really value the opinion of a great writer like yourself.
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A former member wrote:
haha... you're too kind... yeah, the less personal thing is a standard mantra in school... *shrugs* I guess I've gotten too used to it, maybe :)