Identity Theft
By Mirage
Shadows cast upon individuality cause confusion in this realm
There's a fusion of two users with their futures at the helm
One becomes the other and the other starts to meld
Each becomes a brother like the summer's solace shelled
Speaking to each other as they delve into their minds
Each one now astonished as to what the other finds
Clarifying logic as they speak philosophy
Opening their souls into what they ought to be
Nevermore confused, as they understand the madness
From one's great frustration to the other's growing sadness
Like water from the rain as I know it only pours
You've stolen my identity...
As I have stolen yours...
- To Tom.
You're the brother I never had. And we shall remain brothers for the rest
of our days.
*Mirage*
and
¤Destined¤Soul¤
Comments on "Identity Theft"
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A former member wrote:
"Clarifying logic as they speak philosophy". Admirable line to a compulsive read. Intelligent. Pure rhythm w/ the right degree of beat & tone. True wit. The Ids & Egos (lefts & rights, etc...) are well weighed as this poem develops its own eloquent Mirage of Self (the Soul Destined?). I felt a little sense of Bill's "The Tempest" in the texture of the 1st 2 lines; nice. [On the other side there is always the Other Side, or alter ego/Id]. Good use of alliteration (espc. Line 4), & the structure, the count was spot on! [How we all so truly steal each others "identities", masks or faces; we soak such Madness as poured into our mouths and spit back the sour sense of Sadness in a vicious cycle: a kind of Systematic Chaos]. You show yourself in this poem & thus it is obviously a personal one (espc. as noted; nice Tribute). Well done!
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On Saturday, October 11, 2008, Leith Plunkett
(237) wrote:
What a touching piece. I loved it. The end really summed it up. lovely rhythm and ryming. Great write :-)