My Anger
By evcfenix
Is a speeding car
Along the highway;
Ready to
Crash
Blow
And burn.
----- Firdaus
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© 2007 evcfenix
Published on Friday, July 27, 2007.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
This, to me is much better. It has a more direct approach
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
*Wonders why people post the name twice* and yes, not to shabby
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, evcfenix
(15) wrote:
it has to be out of habit... (if you picture the words 'my anger' from the title to the secondary title to the poem, you can picture a car getting smaller and smaller. maybe its just me) thank you for commenting!
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
I can see what you meen. I just saw it as two titles and the beginning. Also an old talk on dp is, if the ttle is the beginning of the poem would it not be enough with the first line in the poem so it reads. My anger . then starts with Is a speeding car
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, evcfenix
(15) wrote:
i'll take note on that old talk. it does seem better indeed!
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
I dont mind commenting on new peeps. Wellcome to DP
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, evcfenix
(15) wrote:
i changed it already too! the words were really getting to me after you commented. thanks for the welcome!
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, elisa
(1595) wrote:
rage in high velocity can be .... paradise. nicely done.
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, evcfenix
(15) wrote:
thank you! ur comment means a lot.
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On Friday, July 27, 2007, elisa
(1595) wrote:
*smiles* my pleasure.