Comments by Alanarchy
- "I dug everything up until that last line, which I just couldn't grasp. It doesn't, and forgive me for saying this, make sense. Also *that they followed* is a little harsh. Perhaps that *they've followed* or *they had followed* anyway, that's my criticism. I almost loved this, but it feels unfinished in a way, and fell short. Either way, write on. "
Posted by Alanarchy on "A New Day Dawns Part 2" by NotMyOwn_20
