Comments by dwells
- "Mr. Yellow reminded me of the movie "Reservoir Dogs" where each character was given a color as a last name. I think I saw two points of confusion with the hes and hers in your piece.
Also it seems like it probably takes both of them to swallow him whole, so maybe bosom(s) plural at that stage (thought you were going someplace else briefly). Don't mean to nit-pick and this was quite a vision - what a way to go - Cheers!"
Posted by dwells on "Temptation" by BrideToAgony
