Comments by TropicalSnowstorm
- ""dreading,
the pull of a heart" - interesting closing line. This speaks to me of the duality of being lonely and wanting this to end, but becoming so used to it that when a hand reaches out...there is a recoiling rather than a reciprocation. I think you captured a lot in this piece, but almost all of it in the second stanza. I think as written, the first stanza is not quite as tight as the second, but the second stanza is strong. Anyway, enjoyed your work, as always! Ciao, T/S "
Posted by TropicalSnowstorm on "Twisted" by Olufunke Kolapo
- "This is a wonderful piece, I love how you picture how hope keeps stringing him (us?) along, toiling away for the big pay-off that will probably never come. Ciao, T/S"
Posted by TropicalSnowstorm on "Pole of Hope" by Olufunke Kolapo
- ""Return to me my limbs
Feel this warm sand beneath my feet
Walk this earth one more time
The cool breeze on my face" - just wonderful imagery! I love the entirety of this piece and the sense of quiet comfort it sends me in terms of hope and openly expressed awe at life's wonder. Fantastic job! Ciao, T/S"
Posted by TropicalSnowstorm on "Silent Wish" by Olufunke Kolapo
