Comments by HeadpatSlut
- "Overall it's not bad, but I think you overuse the word "death" here, repeating the words "Dead" and "Dying" over and again, they loose their meaning, which is a shame because other than that, this a really great poem that I enjoyed reading, it really echoes the No Man's Land of trenches that made up the first world war, almost reminding me of "Death of a Ball Turret Gunner" is terms of reality and theme, thanks for posting."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Fear" by DeafSoldier
