Comments by HeadpatSlut
- "It' good, but there are a few things I'd like to point out.
First off, I like the rhyme scheme you hose for this, there are places where it dies down, and an un-steady structure like that can cause a bit of a speed bump when reading.
Secondly, in the second to last line there's a typo, I think you meant to say "SOUL".
Also, a couple of lines lack the same iambic meter as the rest, causing another speed bump if you will.
As it is, I give it a Six."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Soul Reaper" by darkness_descends
