Comments by Sketso
- "all in all, it's surprising in a good sense, as it's an attempt outside of your normal works/style, and that means you're stretching/growing/progressing! *applause*"
Posted by Sketso on "Sweet dreams" by Ashteroth
- "dare I say... and no offense is intended at all... it hit me like a wheelbarrel full of cliche bricks. The thoughts were nice, and I doubt anyone would claim theft, as the thoughts are pretty much universally felt. The first 2 stanzas were nicely done, although the 2nd one destroyed my hopes for an atypical rhyme scheme. I was elated thinking you were gonna run with an "aaba ccbc" scheme there for a second. ;) That's just me though. The ending provided a nice twist, ensuring the write as a whole belongs on a dark poetry site, killing all the happy happy joy thoughts with the fact that it was all just daydreaming."
Posted by Sketso on "Sweet dreams" by Ashteroth
