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- "Gratitude. Love your comment as always.
I thought the first stanza was very weak, glad you noticed too.
Do you have any suggestions? I'm still working on the poem, would appreciate your input. "
Posted by Olufunke Kolapo on "Twisted" by Olufunke Kolapo
- "This reminds me of a certain sultry night I had in the park. The stroll turned into a roll and God, did I fly. This was short, sweet and sinful. "
Posted by Lux on "Sexy Darkness" by Olufunke Kolapo
- ""dreading,
the pull of a heart" - interesting closing line. This speaks to me of the duality of being lonely and wanting this to end, but becoming so used to it that when a hand reaches out...there is a recoiling rather than a reciprocation. I think you captured a lot in this piece, but almost all of it in the second stanza. I think as written, the first stanza is not quite as tight as the second, but the second stanza is strong. Anyway, enjoyed your work, as always! Ciao, T/S "
Posted by TropicalSnowstorm on "Twisted" by Olufunke Kolapo
- "Reminds me of the fleeting feelings of a first love in that this piece seemed to jump from one line to the next. I feel like this poem could have been longer, but its good nonetheless!
^_^"
Posted by Pride Ed on "My First Love" by Olufunke Kolapo
- "This is a wonderful piece, I love how you picture how hope keeps stringing him (us?) along, toiling away for the big pay-off that will probably never come. Ciao, T/S"
Posted by TropicalSnowstorm on "Pole of Hope" by Olufunke Kolapo
- "Thanks so much for your ever sweet and encouraging comments. And most especially for really appreciating the message of the haiku. You are the first person who understands it fully."
Posted by Olufunke Kolapo on "Clouds" by Olufunke Kolapo
- "This is the third work I've read of yours. I think you are talented. What I have to say about this one is of your choices, or maybe the way you think. I admired your articulation before, but articulation is the presentation of an idea. This was articulate to me, but here, I admire your ideas. Dining with laughter, chewing on suffering, drinking the wine of desertion. It wouldn't be the same if you said that you drank the wine of suffering, for example. I like what you chose to put with what. And nice message. Wise message :)"
Posted by Octopus on "Lessons I Learnt" by Olufunke Kolapo
- "The stark contrast between life and death I see in this is very epic for a haiku. I like how it's completely ambient but almost founded in power. I appreciate how perfectly a haiku this is. You didn't let syllables inhibit your expression of a succinct, purely and simply imagerial idea. That is a real haiku to me. You are excellent!"
Posted by Octopus on "Clouds" by Olufunke Kolapo
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