This is what I wanted...

By ashrain

i wanted to write you something today
with vivid imagery
and flowery words
with an explenation
of my emotion
and how my heart sings
when it hears your name

but i didnt want to be repetitive
i didnt want to be trite
i didnt want to sound like
all the love songs
that remind me
of how i feel

i wanted to write you something today
something colorful
in cursive
with big rounded letters
something girly
to express how you make me feel
when you say my name

but i didnt want to seem weak
i didnt want to be annoying
i didnt want to be like
the other poets
who use the same words
to express thier feelings

i wanted to write you something today
on plain paper
with simple words
in pencil
with erasure marks
to cover where i misspelled things
because sometimes i do that

but i didnt want to use to many words
i didnt want to repeat myself
i didnt want you to think
i thought about it to much
so i decided to be simple
and say it like this...

....i love you

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© 2006 ashrain
Published on Tuesday, July 25, 2006.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"
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  • RubyXero On Wednesday, February 27, 2008, RubyXero (481)By person wrote:

    yes. very beautifully moving piece. heartfelt and deep. i loved it

  • Phoenix On Sunday, February 24, 2008, Phoenix (8)By person wrote:

    I love this poem, my ex gf she wrote the exact same poem for me 6 months ago... But i can see where she got it from now

  • Mari On Sunday, February 24, 2008, Mari (419)By person wrote:

    so. cute.

  • A former member wrote: It's okay to be girly sometimes = ) ~Lost

  • TaintedButterfly On Tuesday, July 25, 2006, TaintedButterfly (653)By person wrote:

    How brilliantly beautiful! Well done... Julia~

  • ashrain On Tuesday, July 25, 2006, ashrain (16)By person wrote:

    thank you! i felt terriblly girly while writing it..and hated it the first few times i read back over it..but it floored the person it was for..so it was worth it. ~ash

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