This is what I wanted...
By ashrain
i wanted to write you something today
with vivid imagery
and flowery words
with an explenation
of my emotion
and how my heart sings
when it hears your name
but i didnt want to be repetitive
i didnt want to be trite
i didnt want to sound like
all the love songs
that remind me
of how i feel
i wanted to write you something today
something colorful
in cursive
with big rounded letters
something girly
to express how you make me feel
when you say my name
but i didnt want to seem weak
i didnt want to be annoying
i didnt want to be like
the other poets
who use the same words
to express thier feelings
i wanted to write you something today
on plain paper
with simple words
in pencil
with erasure marks
to cover where i misspelled things
because sometimes i do that
but i didnt want to use to many words
i didnt want to repeat myself
i didnt want you to think
i thought about it to much
so i decided to be simple
and say it like this...
....i love you
Comments on "This is what I wanted..."
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On Wednesday, February 27, 2008, RubyXero
(481) wrote:
yes. very beautifully moving piece. heartfelt and deep. i loved it
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On Sunday, February 24, 2008, Phoenix
(8) wrote:
I love this poem, my ex gf she wrote the exact same poem for me 6 months ago... But i can see where she got it from now
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On Sunday, February 24, 2008, Mari
(419) wrote:
so. cute.
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A former member wrote:
It's okay to be girly sometimes = ) ~Lost
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On Tuesday, July 25, 2006, TaintedButterfly
(653) wrote:
How brilliantly beautiful! Well done... Julia~
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On Tuesday, July 25, 2006, ashrain
(16) wrote:
thank you! i felt terriblly girly while writing it..and hated it the first few times i read back over it..but it floored the person it was for..so it was worth it. ~ash