You

By Eladrim

I understand everything that you've said to me
How can I not, I replay it constantly.
My deepest fear has now come true,
But still I will fight to hold on to you.

Like a rope been broken my emotions are frayed,
And with all my will I refuse to fade
Into the darkness of one taken from two,
And still I try to hold on to you.

Hope, not simply an illusion of the human mind
Hope, the worn out tool that will help me find
Something to grasp, something I can cling to.
I'm too weak to hold on to you.

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Copyright 2005 Eladrim
Published on Wednesday, May 11, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: One thing: The title could explain more of the poem... just a suggestion. "You" is undefined.

  • A former member wrote: Original is your poetry, I've loved every poem... This one like the others is so deep..dark...painful..."I'm too weak to hold on to you" means so much... I much love it. -Salem

  • abattoir On Sunday, August 28, 2005, abattoir (115)By person wrote:

    the first line is my favorite! abattoir

  • abattoir On Sunday, August 28, 2005, abattoir (115)By person wrote:

    I agree with elise about the rope part. this poem is captivating. your style is real and the way you let the reader touch it is talent!

  • A former member wrote: I read other peoples comments and I feel frightened. I enjoy your poetry but have nothing wonderful like that to say. Let me try; this poem is a great depiction of humanity. We all have felt it at times. Well written. It comes across clear.

  • Eladrim On Wednesday, May 11, 2005, Eladrim (47)By person wrote:

    thanks for the comment, what you said was more than good enough because it's what you felt

  • Elise On Wednesday, May 11, 2005, Elise (187)By person wrote:

    I love the comparison between you and the rope, such perfect meaning. Great write.

  • Serenity On Wednesday, May 11, 2005, Serenity (469)By person wrote:

    I really do love the way you are with words. But you were never weak, just misguided. And I'm sure they'll forgive and forget. :)

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