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You
By Eladrim
I understand everything that you've said to me
How can I not, I replay it constantly.
My deepest fear has now come true,
But still I will fight to hold on to you.
Like a rope been broken my emotions are frayed,
And with all my will I refuse to fade
Into the darkness of one taken from two,
And still I try to hold on to you.
Hope, not simply an illusion of the human mind
Hope, the worn out tool that will help me find
Something to grasp, something I can cling to.
I'm too weak to hold on to you.
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Copyright 2005 Eladrim
Published on Wednesday, May 11, 2005.
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Comments on "You"
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A former member wrote:
One thing: The title could explain more of the poem... just a suggestion. "You" is undefined.
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A former member wrote:
Original is your poetry, I've loved every poem... This one like the others is so deep..dark...painful..."I'm too weak to hold on to you" means so much...
I much love it. -Salem
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On Sunday, August 28, 2005, abattoir
(115)
wrote:
the first line is my favorite! abattoir
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On Sunday, August 28, 2005, abattoir
(115) wrote:
I agree with elise about the rope part. this poem is captivating. your style is real and the way you let the reader touch it is talent!
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A former member wrote:
I read other peoples comments and I feel frightened. I enjoy your poetry but have nothing wonderful like that to say. Let me try; this poem is a great depiction of humanity. We all have felt it at times. Well written. It comes across clear.
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On Wednesday, May 11, 2005, Eladrim
(47) wrote:
thanks for the comment, what you said was more than good enough because it's what you felt
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On Wednesday, May 11, 2005, Elise
(188) wrote:
I love the comparison between you and the rope, such perfect meaning. Great write.
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On Wednesday, May 11, 2005, Serenity
(469) wrote:
I really do love the way you are with words. But you were never weak, just misguided. And I'm sure they'll forgive and forget. :)
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