Concupiscence

By gracefullytorn




Your eyes shame the sun
Mine pale in comparison
Two holy beams that open up the sky
and shower the defeated with flowers
Buds of pure hope
Stems of strength
The glittering iris of distress
If ever there was a bright
Luminous to the highest extent
Your golden orbs would surpass it
I'm envious in my obsessing
Stifling my views because I'm lost in yours.

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Copyright 2004 gracefullytorn
Published on Saturday, March 27, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • girlafraid On Saturday, April 3, 2004, girlafraid (479)By person wrote:

    your endings are always intense...but so is everything leading up to it..excellent...*afraid*

  • purr_verse On Saturday, March 27, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    lovely piece... "glittering iris of distress" especially appeals to me. i'll echo season: welcome to dp. :)

  • gracefullytorn On Monday, March 29, 2004, gracefullytorn (61)By person wrote:

    yea i especially liked that line cuz an iris is a flower and a part of your eye

  • A former member wrote: thats good! I love it!

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