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Perforated
By Crush Room
Holding onto me firmly
with one hand;
and my heart softly with the other
I feel the gentle dot::::by::::dot perforation,
word by word,
seperate
with a delicate {tear}
each time I punish myself
by visiting you.
And although your strong, hollow hands
are capable
of the most tender acts of love......
They seem certain to screw me up
into a crumpled
piece
of
nothing
....that never existed.
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© 2008 Crush Room
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A former member wrote:
I really like the concept developing here... and the hollow hands, which seem apt to impart holes and nothingness... or to devour. But I wonder at the words in the final stanza... and if the theme is not disrupted there. unique and intriguing, however, nice work.
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On Friday, August 29, 2008, Crush Room
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wrote:
I think that was the point that I was trying to make....it was an experience that was disrupted...I was trying to capture it metaphorically (ie thats exactly how I feel/felt). Thanks for your comments.....thank you xx
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