Untitled

By Pureheartless

dieing fast in my shallow words
breathing lies and words unheard.
you look at me like im crazy.
sorry love but you wont daze me.

your only in my world if i make it that way,
and i want you here so please sit and stay.
these walls are melting so i'll be able to see outside.
if you come in i promise you i wont hide.

looking out now a view of the sea.
i feel and smell the freshness of the air.
again i am alive...
but im dieing fast in my shallow words.

the world slowly crumbles to my feet,
for not even i have a world to live in.
im living in someone elses and they dont know how to live.
ill teach you how to breath if you take my hand.

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© 2007 Pureheartless
Published on Friday, December 21, 2007.     Filed under: "Non-Fiction" and "Poetry"
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  • RubyXero On Monday, December 24, 2007, RubyXero (481)By person wrote:

    first two stanzas were really good. not being effected by the looks, having control and choosing. courage. 'i wont hide...' the rhythm was great. the last two seemed slightly off to me. but they were still good if i read them seperate. overall i like.

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