Comments by All Members
- "I like it. I don't think it was intentional, but 'tears' is a good play on words, too. As for a title... howabout "drown"? Or maybe "swallow"?"
Posted by morgue_white on "Let me know." by DarkAyla
- "Don't change it. Its rythmical, it flows. It should be lyrics. Try to make a song with it, why don't you?"
Posted by Unknown on "Let me know." by DarkAyla
- "I know this isn't my best. But i'd appreciate some opinions on the piece as well as some new title suggestions"
Posted by DarkAyla on "Let me know." by DarkAyla
- "immolated dreams... nightmare-on-the-cross... I can't quite figure out what to call this one..."
Posted by morgue_white on "I am." by DarkAyla
- "Hmm... fades to darkness/black is a bit overused on this site... and juxtaposition of light/dark imagery tends to come off as overdone, too... other than that, I love the beginning and I like the end. "Chastised" should be used more!"
Posted by morgue_white on "The Stealing of Innocence." by DarkAyla
- "Beautiful imagery, particularly in the second stanza. I like the style. Most people who write a poem like that try to make it rhyme perfectly, and it ruins it. You chose well"
Posted by morgue_white on "Corridor Of Awakening." by DarkAyla
- "what the hell, i just wrote this, to get it out.
i'm probably not goin to keep it up here for very long."
Posted by DarkAyla on "I am." by DarkAyla
- "I know this needs alot of editing, maybe a new format, and i also need a title, i have no idea what to call this one, what do you all think?"
Posted by DarkAyla on "I am." by DarkAyla
- "Corridor of Awakening sounds like a nice title if you're really looking for an opinion...but this is they way it was written, the title cxplains the story so much more"
Posted by The Fallen Angel on "Corridor Of Awakening." by DarkAyla
