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- "love the tale... that first stanza alliterates with inspired tongue.... the description of what becomes a mask is quite entrancing... and the motive seems to be well revealed. I like the way the mask functions on a second level.... the mask of God..... revealing it for what it is.... all of the "H"s..... but, I would like something that is left undone, unsaid, unknown..... some bit of mystery to remain for the reader, perhaps.... that suggests more of the dirt beneath those Godly fingers... maybe. Excellent read, top shelf, as you'd say. *bows before Untold words*"
Posted by Unknown on "Playing God, Beneath the Overpass." by TheProphetUntold
- "and im not even gonna comment on the style or voice or self contained assonance [which all is gorgeous and well developed and written; superbly] blah blah...... because it all becomes irrelevant in light of the emotion.......the absolute moving beauty and breaking. i am stunned."
Posted by Unknown on "Playing God, Beneath the Overpass." by TheProphetUntold
- "....this moved me in the most solemn severe and shattering way; a parable, painful and pulling....the resonance of our own souls seems inaudible and yet deafening.....how? how do we even bare to move through this world without conscience.......move in this world without heeding our own? you taught me in this; a lesson i used to know.. .. . .thank you. bless you. none of this may have been your intent, but......thank you ever so."
Posted by Unknown on "Playing God, Beneath the Overpass." by TheProphetUntold
- "absolutely beautiful imagery, for a moment i thought i was lucky enough to stumble onto a happy poem on DarkPoetry but alas not. still a wonderful piece :)"
Posted by Unknown on "Flowers In Her Hair." by TheProphetUntold
- "love the imagery, the subtlety..... it lets the images talk for it, as it perhaps should... those damn prying eyes.... the looks that is violence in its being.... don't you want "passed" rather than "past"? Well done, lad. *bows*"
Posted by Unknown on "Flowers In Her Hair." by TheProphetUntold
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