Surreal (*1
By Asouldivided
She graves like the vine through my veins
Mixes clouds under my sins, clouds of smoke
Once there was this time of sufferfixation
Hearts pumping black sorrow
One last hit, between the other millions
Here I layed me drown
The change came suddenly
Yesterday I met a girl…
She is my red
Goodbye the black
Smoldering blister inside me
shining redlight
Draw her heart on my wall
Painted with my favourite tunes
The addiction rises back
Broke these flower she gave me
Ok let’s be honest just this time
“I eat the sun again and again,
this tiny flower of yours”
She screams for redemption
And it tasted so sweet.
One last injection of hope
“Are you dead”, I whisper
My ear is touched only by
A pale deaf sound from her lips
My mouth creating a perfect horror
Then the colors start to fade
The gun points to this empy gap
she kreated in my mind
“Shoot…shoot”; the voice is right
But there is nothing worth to shoot
This time I have learned my lesson
Again the addiction-seek succeed.
I’m feeling quite alright by now, 'cause
Today I met a girl…
She is my red
Goodbye the black
Comments on "Surreal (*1"
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A former member wrote:
Good poem. I like it.
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On Thursday, August 31, 2006, Asouldivided
(21) wrote:
feedback and criticism would be much appreciated!