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Looking Up
By Ideas
Whispers in the darkness
I still see your face
In the darkness of my ceiling
I’m so out of place
Because where I feel I belong
You ripped away
Your arms, that’s all I needed
We run out of things to say
And I realize
You stopped dreaming
I stopped caring
Now, there's just this ceiling
Baby, where'd you go?
I'm dying where it counts most
And I'm taking you with me
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On Sunday, July 3, 2011, Noztic
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wrote:
Just pure genius
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A former member wrote:
what a way to end an already wonderful write. those last two lines .. WOW! mind blowing. this write is haunting and an act of pure ingenuity!
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A former member wrote:
"I'm dying where it counts most/And I'm taking you with me" Shit...this blew chunks through my chest and left my heart vulnerably in the open for the world to rip apart. Wonderful rhyme scheme. ~*Beth*~
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On Friday, July 7, 2006, BroKen-GlaSSHeArT
(69) wrote:
wow...this hit some note in me and it haunts with a sense of dajavue...love it.
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On Friday, July 7, 2006, heart broken suicide
(18) wrote:
i thought i was the only one who saw faces in ceilings...i really like this poem
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